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"Zara, get down here," her father cried as he looked over a long platinum staff that contained a dark blue stone and a platinum crown with a light blue diamond in the center of the front. Her father was a tall elf, with a flowing white beard that nearly touched the floor, a mustache that matched the beard, blue eyes and pierced pointed ears. He wore a lime green robe that drags a bit behind him and it has the family emblem engraved in gold on the center. On his head, a intricate crown rests upon it, with various small light blue gems entangled in it. Footsteps can be heard coming down the stairs, getting progressively louder. Soon Zara is at the bottom of the stairs. Her lengthy purple hair in braid, being held together by a silver hair clip with an amethyst embedded in the middle of it. She had baby blue eyes similar to her father's, as well as pointed pieced ears. She wore a light-weight pink armor with her family emblem on it, a silver tiara with a green stone in the center, and a brown satchel.

"Sorry if I fell behind father," Zara apologized. "I had to make sure that the area was secure."

"Sweetheart, you're going to become the leader of this kingdom. You can't be falling behind for everything," her father stated for what seemed like the thousandth time. "Has everything been set for the coronation?"

"Yes sir," Zara replied affirmatively.

"Alright. Tell the guards to let in the citizens and protect their posts. If anything goes wrong, make sure the weaker civilians have safely evacuated," her father instructed.

"Yes sir," Zara obliged. She then runs out to inform the guards. The guests soon flood to the ceremony area as the torches shined bright in the darkness of the night sky. The water glistened from the light of the stars. The smell of delicious chocolate cake filled the air.  Zara and her father were on a stage, as her father walked up to the podium.

"My loyal subjects. You have all served me well during my time in power, and I have done everything to do the same for you. We've accomplished many things. We have stopped the vampires from taking over our land, we have defeated the orcs on many occasions, we have helped increase the human population. I am becoming older and it's clear that I'm no longer in my prime. My daughter here has been training for this day since she was a little girl. She is strong, smart and is probably the best heir I could have asked for. I trust that you will give her the same respect you have given me. I present to you, the new monarch, queen Zara," her father announced as he steps off the podium. He places the platinum crown on Zara's head, removes the dark blue stone from the staff and puts it in her sword. The crowd bursts into thunderous applause. Suddenly, the ground begins to shake violently, as an army of demons storms the kingdom with packs of cerberi, vampires, orcs, giant spiders and various other hellspawns attack the kingdom. Zara charges into battle slicing away at them, taking the ones she hits out easily. That is until she encounters their leader. He's a towering god, over half the size of the castle, with a strong build, devil horns, and black armor. Zara tries to strike it but the creature appears to be immune, not getting a single scratch. He strikes her down with his flaming axe. The pain soon becomes to much for her as she passes out, the last thing she seeing being her home in flames.

To be continued....
Might change the name
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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017
this aint to bad but u should try to make your description more exciting possibly like using more metaphors for example what u did with describing your towering god this could be a bit more dynamic maybe next time we could see what her life was like before this moment I am excited to see more from u maybe if u can I could give u advice on writing share the knowledge I know ;) (Wink) Huggle! 
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Chemlord Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2017
I will. This was just kind of to introduce things. Didn't have that much time.
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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2017
U got use time my chemi time is an important component to story writing quality over quantity is wat I always say
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Chemlord Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2017
Okay
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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2017
K be the best u can be my girl ;)
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Chemlord Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2017
I'm trying. This might be what was one the toughest parts to write. It should get less cringe worthy down the line
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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2017
It's not cringe worthy bby u have to think on it and think of the reader
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Chemlord Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2017
I'm trying
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nobody5679 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Does this exist in the universe Reith Cat and Vei and such?
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Chemlord Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017
No
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nobody5679 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh ok, well then they should call Legolas, Aragon and Gimli, plus Gandalf. Then they'll stand a chance XD
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Chemlord Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017
XD
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